jane is jane
what were the parents thinking
the rain falls on the plain
the solid and unblinking
ann is an
article indefinite
a suitcase without tags
a promise from a profligate
a message washed in sand
my waiting room confederate.
proficient ann
prolific ann
ann is an historian
the past pluperfect at her hand . . . but trickling
through the ampersands, evading
ann’s aligning hand, grains drift
upon her planking floor in
sighs of ans, in
ebbs
of a knife-green and undulating strand of vast beguiling
continent, where corals reef and plankton
roar out: atlantis!
(or a glimpse of it)
singular
indefinite
Image: K. Bischoping
what were the parents thinking
the rain falls on the plain
the solid and unblinking
ann is an
article indefinite
a suitcase without tags
a promise from a profligate
a message washed in sand
my waiting room confederate.
prolific ann
ann is an historian
the past pluperfect at her hand . . . but trickling
through the ampersands, evading
ann’s aligning hand, grains drift
upon her planking floor in
sighs of ans, in
ebbs
of a knife-green and undulating strand of vast beguiling
continent, where corals reef and plankton
roar out: atlantis!
(or a glimpse of it)
singular
indefinite
Image: K. Bischoping
Would you have saved this for "ampersand" had you known?
ReplyDeleteP'raps.
ReplyDeleteFabulous, K! A singular feat.
ReplyDeletefun verse,
ReplyDeleteenjoyed it,
ReplyDeletewow.
you are quite a poet.
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Feedback welcome on this pair of odd little works, inspired by the indefinite article (just cuz), and separated by the picture.
Too brilliant for a certain plethora of poets but I get it and love it...fabulous all through but especially here:
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the past pluperfect at her hand . . . but trickling
through the ampersands, evading
ann’s aligning hand, grains drift
upon her planking floor in
sighs of ans,
your friend, trickling through the ampersands..xxxj
ok of the two, the second is truly captivating...i like them both but i think you had more than a little fun in the second which was a joy to read...that and i like ampersands
ReplyDeleteI just loved this. I did not actually realize that they were two different poems as, of course, they are connected. If I had a preference, it actually would be for the first - although I think they definitely should be together. I thought it was wonderful, truly. My only question is why "promised by a profligate," instead of a promise?
ReplyDeleteI wasn't sure if the promised ran on from the suitcase, as written--I don't think it does, but this is why I prefer the idea of a noun promise.
Well done. K
Really really loved the sharp and extravagant word play--that first stanza on jane is perfect, and the puns and double entendres just build and improve as the piece(s)progress(es)Fine and delightful writing.
ReplyDeleteThe 100-word limit we write to on this blog is a killer! I originally had "a promise from a profligatc and now it's back, per manicdaily's advice. (I had to lop another word out to do it, ouch ouch, but I agree it feels better.) I changed the title, too, to say "Two Poems" now so it's maybe clearer.
ReplyDeleteKathy, brilliant musings that stir a feeling of all that is indefinite. Sometimes when writing I have to ponder whether to use "the" or "an" and often I go back and forth between the two. Thought-provoking poetry from a gifted word artist. And thank you also for your comments on my poem. After reading, I realized that there had been issues with the man in the poem that unconsciously perhaps colored my choice of words.
ReplyDeleteI liked it!
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