Wednesday, July 13, 2011

Another Mouse


A mouse runs from the subway train,
along the rail and down the drain
and wishes he was home again
and that he’d listened to his mom
who warned him that the train might come
and cried out when he stood too near
the edge pretending not to hear
and watched the mice and wondered how
they knew the train was coming now
with screaming wheels, the rails groaned
and left his mother all alone;
and he among the grit and grime
now had to find a place in time
to hide before another train
chased his friends away again.

Original photo by Hamron.

31 comments:

  1. For the month of July, the members of Exquisite Corpse are writing 100 words a day on each letter of the alphabet in turn.

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  2. That was a cute mouse/mice poem. I hope they all found safe places to live. ; )

    Thanks for your visit to my ABC Wednesday post today.

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  3. I think it may be safer if all mice moved to the country!

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  4. Whew, I guess he made it to outsmart the train for another day.

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  5. Poor little mouse!
    ROG, ABC Wednesday team

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  6. Your mouse post is much better!

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  7. A hard life and all in the day of a mouse!! You have an excellent poem here well written!!

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  8. You're lucky it was only a mouse you saw onthe subway tracks... where I live they're more like RUS's (from Golman's The Princess Bride -rodents of unusual size)!!!

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  9. Awwww... we live and we learn eh! Very nice poetry. Thanks for visiting me too. :)

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  10. Aw, lovely! I like this tale of the mouse.

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  11. I was there. It was like a movie. How wonderfully you animated and personified the little mouse. The rhyme gave it flair and personality but didn't make it feel arch or strained. What a nice present, so well written!

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  12. what an adventure for the mouse,

    great imagery,
    Happy New Year.

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  13. Cute poem/story! I hope you write children's verse; I think you'd be very good at it.

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  14. what a cute story and a great way to explain the random running back and forth of a mouse at the subway.

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  15. Good story! Nicely written!
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/01/08/billy-bully-bull/

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  16. smiles...fun little tale...and perhaps this time he will remember what his mother told him...smiles.

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  17. ha nice...i like that you take the character of a mouse to bring across your morale...nice job..

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  18. yet another blast from the past....
    i def like mice stories...

    and thanks for the intel the other day too

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  19. Fun story with a moral. Kids love the personification of animals, I suspect.

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  20. Aww poor ickle mouse, I love the moral in this tale, beatifully crafted.

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  21. Ha,, great post.. and I had not read it before... thank you for sharing.

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  22. A new one for me ~ Very nice perspective from the mouse ~

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  23. smiles... it would've saved me a bit of trouble in my youth if i had listened to what my mom has said more..

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  24. Am glad he was saved this time at least and maybe he has learnt his lesson and will find his way back home someday?Wonderfully written:-)

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