For bescarved doctors who
In those nights of topaz
Watched an eagle land up
On the moon
Now greyed knickerknackers
They’re hobbling toward
Heaven and gingersnaps
Just before noon.
For emergency callers
(True-hearted apostles)
Bringing pestos amore
To an ex with one eye
For pipers who pipe in
The cricketing team
So eagerly snubbed by
The zenith of tween.
For a hoarse gambler stalling
For Slurpees, for hope
Or towers to cease
Falling free
For a young—and rainy—river’s road
Beneath the chestnut-
Crayoned trees . . .
For 20 weightings on your heart
This poor small labyrinth of art.
Wait! Now, go back to the beginning and touch each line in turn. And, if you like this sort of poetic puzzle, make sure to check out π recalled.
Image from MyMaze.
In those nights of topaz
Watched an eagle land up
On the moon
Now greyed knickerknackers
They’re hobbling toward
Heaven and gingersnaps
Just before noon.
For emergency callers
(True-hearted apostles)
Bringing pestos amore
To an ex with one eye
For pipers who pipe in
The cricketing team
So eagerly snubbed by
The zenith of tween.
For a hoarse gambler stalling
For Slurpees, for hope
Or towers to cease
Falling free
For a young—and rainy—river’s road
Beneath the chestnut-
Crayoned trees . . .
For 20 weightings on your heart
This poor small labyrinth of art.
Wait! Now, go back to the beginning and touch each line in turn. And, if you like this sort of poetic puzzle, make sure to check out π recalled.
Image from MyMaze.
At once a poem and a numerical riddle. Solution later...
ReplyDeletegreat entry and poem
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem!
ReplyDeleteLessons at Home is one of my entries.
very intriguing narrative
ReplyDeleteROG, ABC Wednesday team
Love the imagery of crayoned trees.
ReplyDeletelovely poem :)
ReplyDeleteA lovely poem. One of those that has single words here and there that jump up and smile at the reader. Very nicely done!
ReplyDeletehttp://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/05/treasure/
This poem's secret is that it holds 20 allusions to an unsung number: 11. Read on for details on a few of them.
ReplyDeleteThe allusions run from the "doctors who" in the 1st line (11 actors have played Dr. Who on BBC TV) and the topaz of the 2nd (topaz being the birthstone of the 11th month)...to the final line's allusion to the labyrinth of 11 circuits at Chartres Cathedral, pictured.
Some are more obvious, some are obscure, and a few will make the most sense in Canada, where Laurentien pencil crayons, the 11th being chestnut brown, are as popular as Crayola crayons.
The title? The human heart (adult, male) weighs an average of 11 ounces.
Way too clever! But eleven is hardly "unsung."
ReplyDeleteMy axe goes to eleven.
ReplyDeletei loved the narration... though there are some parts which I failed to understand :P blame my poor understanding but i really enjoyed reading it. the way you have framed each line is so different and unique
ReplyDeleteI love the numerical rhymes in your poem and it was great to read this. I like your closing lines very much
ReplyDeletehttp://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/05/today%e2%80%99s-feelings/
Love the rhyming couplet at the end.
ReplyDeleteHere is my entry:
http://jackedwardspoetry.blogspot.com/2011/10/everyone.html
Thank you for allowing us into your labyrinth of your art.
ReplyDeleteRosie
interesting and clever write! :)
ReplyDeleteAmazing effort. On all levels.
ReplyDeletePosted to dVerse Poets' Open Link Night at
ReplyDeletehttp://dversepoets.com/2011/12/06/openlinknight-week-21/
and to dVerse Poets' Poetry and Philosophy prompt (http://dversepoets.com/2012/02/11/poetics-poetry-and-philosophy/), for I think the poem offers a small statement about the role of art.
DeleteDazzling poem, Kathy, speaking of a full palette! xxxj
ReplyDeleteLiked the rhyming you added, greatly done. That labryinth seems to run deep, truly wonderful verse.
ReplyDeleteLoved this! Loved the tribute to 11 and how it was done--loved the tone and timbre of this piece--
ReplyDeleteha that was fascinating...i did go back and hover and lo and behold...magic...smiles.
ReplyDeleteComplex--lots of fun as well. Thanks for the hints as I'm awful at puzzles--but the imagery and combinations you've blended here are most succulent in themselves.
ReplyDeleteVery clever and intriguing poem/puzzle!
ReplyDeleteAlso, I stopped by to thank you for your fun contribution to this week's Limerick-Off. I hope you'll be a frequent participant! I post a new one each Sunday/Monday.
Thanks again!
Absolutely amazing!
ReplyDeleteincredible.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the wordplay of this.
ReplyDeleteMy account does not allow me to enjoy the fun! Is it not appliable to mobile devices?
ReplyDeleteI'm only on an old-school laptop, so I can't tell. The fun, in brief, is to look for 20 allusions to the number 11.
Deletei remember this one...and it fascinates me now as much as it did then....way cool....
ReplyDeleteInteresting and modern idea for a poem. Hyperlinks to a lot more great words and poetry. Very great.
ReplyDeleteIntriguing and very well done - a fellow Canuck here - originally from Toronto (well,Scarborough, but you know - close enough to know Yonge Street's the longest street in the world) - great,fun, fact-filled poem. Well done.
ReplyDeletehttp://aleapingelephant.blogspot.com/2012/02/in-house-of-moon-madness.html
wow...this is wicked cool...love the idea.. what a treat
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