Dove was slipping into one of his moods, the clouds moving in. “You go without me,” he said to Raven. “I don’t think I can stand another night coming home empty-handed.”
“Tonight’ll be different,” said Raven. “Howsbout a blonde? I’ll get you a blonde, you’ll cheer right up!”
And so, perched in his corner of the club, Dove watched his friend move, to and fro as the evening dragged on and the talent dried up, nearly last call before he brought the girl back to their table . . . but by then Dove was gone, and the rain had started up again.
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I loved this...
ReplyDeletewow - really great
ReplyDelete"Howsbout" -- I know a nice save of the 100 word count when I see one, Mr. Roy! Since you're writing about blondes and wrote me a comment about reading Chandler, I give you this felicitous link: http://www.goodreads.com/quotes/show/33504
ReplyDeleteEntertaining and imaginative!
ReplyDeletemade me imagine the scene... love it!
ReplyDeleteJJRod'z
i guess tonight wont be too different...nice vignette....
ReplyDeleteClever stuff.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
... just might go out club hopping tonight!!
ReplyDelete@Kathy: Yes, you caught me cheating. But I think it's a great word, without all the burdensome apostrophes of "how's 'bout."
ReplyDelete@Catfish Tales: Thanks for noticing. I thought it important that, on top of everything else, Raven broke his promise.
I really like this, its very original and I enjoyed the writing style, esp 'the evening dragged on and the talent dried up'
ReplyDeletePity the girls;-)
ReplyDeleteah...talent
ReplyDeleteOne should never leave before the lights come on. :) Delightful and fascinating hundred.
ReplyDeletevery clever, liked it
ReplyDeletethanks for sharing
martine
Kathy, thanks for your comment on my blog---Long Black Veil. We could go for days, couldn't we, with this prompt. Love that you brought raven into your piece. I may give 100 words a try. Good for all writers to condense to the essence.
ReplyDeleteI particularly like the way you show the raven's character.
ReplyDeletewhat a thrill to see you,
ReplyDeletebrilliant piece.
Happy Poetry Picnic.
ooo! very interesting tale you're weaving here.
ReplyDeletethanks for writing and thanks for sharing.
Quite a story, in just a few words.
ReplyDeleteWING man - like it.
ReplyDeleteROG, ABC Wednesday team